Hannah Elizabeth Jensen

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HANNAH ELIZABETH JENSEN

Name: Hannah Elizabeth Jensen
Nicknames: Anna, Lizzy, Jensen
Age: Twenty-One
Date of Birth: july 18th
Grade:College- Junior
Program: Academic
Orientation:straight
Nationality: British, American, Italian
Home Town: Philadelphia, PA
Play by: Rosie Huntington- Whiteley

--- CARING- Hannah is a caring person. She hates to see people unhappy, or in distress. She always wants to help someone or something. She hates seeing animals tortured. She would go out of her way to help someone. She would take a bullet for a stranger. She will to anything in her power to make something happen for a person. She will try to get stranger food and water, or family some money. She will do anything for anyone. She hates seeing people struggle. She hates it to the end of the girl. She is probably the most caring person you will ever met.

--- STUBBORN Hannah is a stubborn girl. She had her mind set on something you aren't going to change it, really. If she wants something she will go after it, and she will not stop until she gets it. She loves to chase thing when people or something isn;t really given to her. She loves to work her butt off for something. She will work hard for waht she gets, and she refuses to back down.

--- INNOCENT Hannah is a innocent girl. She had never did much with a guy or with anyone. She is pretty pure in eyes of another. She hates being innocent but that is what makes her, her as well. She doesn't sleep with all the guys or doesn't do naughty things. SHe is very much the goody two shoes but that doesn't mean she will tell on you if you are doing something, no she isn't a a snitch. She is definality a good girl, but she doesn't want to be.

LIKES: Boys, College, friends, family, cooking, dogs, cats, clothes, Aeropostale, summer
DISLIKES: jerks, bitchy girls, winter, backstabbers, running, to much of a good thing, ranch, cows, birds,scary movies.

Hannah was born on July 2nd to parents, Ben and Jenny Jensen. She is the second child of two. She has a older sister named Deana Jensen, who is 22 years old then her. Hannah had normal childhood. The same old, fighting with your sister, and getting in trouble but laughing about it later. She and her sister grew to be best friends and laugh lot and be the beautiful sister that you always got jealous of when they were in middle school together. She was the popular girl that all the boys where hitting on but it wasn't really her thing. She never really flirted back, and then you got into High school.

Hannah got into high school, back to the bottom of the food chain, and she liked it that way. She hated being popular. She was trying to blend in with the way she was comfortable with. She was a freshman in highschool when she became the "innocent girl" as people called her. The girl that never dated boys or partied, the shy girl, but her sophomore year changed it all. She decided to date a junior boy in high school. His name was Julian. He was mexican and he was quite nice to her. She really liked him and was kissing him lot and trying not be innocent but she couldn't do it. She broke up with Julian when he wanted more and she hide back into her shell again trying not be noticed. Her last two year when by without any problems and no big drama, finally she reached college. She was so excited.

She finally moved to the college and got into a dorm room. She passed her first years of college with good grades. She had made some friends. She had made some guy friends that wanted to date her but she didn't want to date them. She is now in her junior year of college and is wanted to make it the best year of her life. She cant wait to date new men and make new friends. Not be so innocent.

Zoey rolled over in her comfortable bed when her alarm started to sing " Wake Up Zoey" in the voice of her aunt. Her aunt bought it for her for Christmas and programed it to sing to her when it was time to get up, and apparently it was time to get up, She sighed a heavy sigh and swung her legs over the side of her bed and put her feet on the cold hardcore floor. The hard was cold, and sent chills up her spine. She yawned and rubbed her eyes. She quickly grabbed her shower stuff and buzzed to the shower. She turned on the shower to hot and stripped down and got in. The hot water hit her body, and all the tiredness seems to go away. She loved hot showers. They relaxed her and woke her up for some reason. She quickly washed her hair in her favorite scent, honey.. She loved her honey shampoo. She finished up and wrapped a towel around her dripping body.

Zoey sighed and walked back to her room and shut the door quietly behind her. She let the towel drop to the ground. She opened a dresseer drawer and slipped on a red lacy thong and put a bra on to match. She always had to match. It was one of her pet peeves if she didn't match, well underwear wise. She never knew what could happen and who you saw or talked too. She smiled. She loved her body. She had a great body from running and playing quidditch, at least she thought so. She shut her undie drawer and opened her pants drawer and pulled out a pair of shorts and slipped them on. She sighed. She loved this shorts. They held alot of memories and she would hate when she would have to give them up. She sighed and shook her head. She couldn't think about him. She couldn't. That wasn't going to make her happy, that would make her extermly sad, and about ready to cry.

Zoey sighed and eased over to her closet and swung the doors open and peeped inside. what to wear? what to wear?" She thought to herself as she pulled out a shirt. No that wouldn't look good. she thought to herself. After five minutes of looking she finalyl decided on a cute long sleeve shirt that was plain and hugged her every curve on her upper body. She smiled as she looked in the mirror. She quickly did her make up which just happens to be black eyeliner, mascara and some power foundations. She sighs. Her outfit is misisng something. She smiles slyly to herself and opens the closet again and pulls out a vest and puts it on. Perfect. She looked beautiful today, at least she thought so. Zoey wasn't vain or anything like this normally. Normal she thought she looked bad. Zoey smiled and smiled on some white sneakers, and decided to go out to the lake for some reason. She just feel a pull to go there for some reason.

Zoey zoomed out of her room and down the stairs of Hogwarts, and was walking to the lake, when she spotted him.. Peter.. Her best friend that she drifted away from. She felt her heart in her chest start to beat louder and louder with each passing second. She wanted to turn around and leave, but her feet made herself walk forward. She smiles softly and start down on the grass a few feet away and took out a doodle pad. She loved to doodle. She felt at home when she did it, and she needed that right now.

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Hi, I'm SAL and I'm eighteen old. I'm FUN. This is my FIRST application. I found NO REGRETS, JUST LOVE from CAUTION V. 2.0.

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- Your application title needs to be lower case.
- Almost every sentence in your personality starts with the word "she." Variety is the spice of life, and also the spice of paragraphs. Otherwise it feels like we're reading a bullet point list and it doesn't flow at all.
- The "she" thing continues into your history.
- Your history is very blocky. You never explain how she found out about Emerson or really much of anything outside of her lost relationship.
- More she's into and throughout your sample. It's almost too hard to read.

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